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Thursday, 14 June 2018
My Messy Room
Hi today I made another storybird poem. This time it was about this girls messy room.
P.S the cats name is socks.
Hi Perle - I really like this poem... it reminds me of my daughter's room! You have definitely painted a picture for your reader. Do you like the poem or the picture book format? Koka Ngaire
Bonjour Perle, It's Kya here. I thought that your poem was spectacular! I loved all the adjectives you used. They added detail and painted a picture in my mind. Your poem reminds you of my sister's room! Your picture for the background was a good choice because it made the words even more valuable. Phenomenal job Perle... From Kya WBS
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Hi Perle - I really like this poem... it reminds me of my daughter's room! You have definitely painted a picture for your reader. Do you like the poem or the picture book format? Koka Ngaire
ReplyDeleteBonjour Perle,
ReplyDeleteIt's Kya here. I thought that your poem was spectacular! I loved all the adjectives you used. They added detail and painted a picture in my mind. Your poem reminds you of my sister's room! Your picture for the background was a good choice because it made the words even more valuable.
Phenomenal job Perle...
From Kya WBS
Hello Allie,
ReplyDeleteI really appreciate your positive feedback. Yes, I did enjoy making it.
From Perle